It’s Friday again! And this is my 99th post, so I’m in a celebratory mood. I’ll have to think up something exciting and hundred-worthy to say on Monday. Watch this space!
In the meantime, here is the picture from Madison’s blog, courtesy this week of Amanda Grey. I hope you like what I did with it – sorry, probably a bit of artistic licence taken on the geography.
Breakout
He’d been running for hours. The moor was undulating and rough – he’d already caught his feet in any number of rabbit holes, but none big enough to hide the box he carried, let alone his weary body.
The rundown shack glowed red in the light of the setting sun. Momentarily, it seemed his salvation, but he knew it was a trap. Standing proud and bold on the empty landscape, it would beckon his pursuers – the most obvious place to run. The box shifted in his hands. He couldn’t afford to stop. He turned and ran, towards the burning horizon.
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OOOH what’s in the box!
*grin* What indeed?
Same as Craig… what’s in the box? Who is he running from? Questions, questions!
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Yeah sorry, bit of a mystery this one. I had more (not much more, but a little) in the longer version, but I had to cut it back to 100 words. I almost took out the box entirely, but it was too good to lose!
I’m with Craig. What’s in the box? Great descriptions.
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LOL, I think I’m going to rename this character Pandora – look how much drama this box is creating! Thanks for stopping by
Very enticing. I want to know what’s in the box that caused it to shift… I got a real ‘end of the day’ sense from this piece. Nice one.
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Thanks Sandra! I think everyone wants to know about the box now, me included!
Congrats on 99! Will definitely watch for #100.
I love how the image works as a desert and a moor. 😀
I loved “The rundown shack glowed red in the light of the setting sun.”
I also wanted to know what was in the box. 🙂
Thanks, Stacey. I like that line too!
Lovely piece of writing with so many unanswered questions – the box (loved that), who he’s running from, will he manage to hide, do we want him to.
I’m here if you fancy a read: http://worksbyclaire.wordpress.com/2012/07/06/100-word-story-music/
Thanks for stopping by, I’m glad you enjoyed it. I’ll come to visit you next!
Gripping!
This has the potential to become a very interesting longer story. I hope you pursue the chain of thought till its end! 🙂
Parul
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I’d definitely love to, Parul. So many times, I would love to continue these pieces. I’m sure I will, one day.
You’ve certainly peaked our curiosity and have the entire readership crying for more. Congrats on #99. I too am looking forward to your next post.
Ooh, the pressure!!! Maybe the next post should be a continuation of this one – kill two birds with one stone!
Really loved this! This was my first ever Fiction Friday and I had to read yours also since we are both Jennifers. (The Jennifer Sisterhood!) Well written and thanks for sharing it! (I’m #11 this week, btw)
Thanks for stopping by, Jennifer. I’m glad you enjoyed what you read. I look forward to hearing more from you in future!
The mystery of the content of that box is what heightens the tension.
I’m guessing he’s carrying the Rabbit’s Foot (from Mission Impossible 3).
lol.
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haha! Maybe, maybe not. I had a hard job cutting this piece down to 100, but I always knew I wanted to keep the box. I’m glad you agree.
Hi Jennifer,
I liked the way you used the box as a plot device yet kept mysterious what was in it. Very effective pursuit story and I felt concern for your protagonist. Thanks for reading and commenting on my story.
Ron
Thanks Ron, I’m so pleased with how the box worked for everyone!
Oh!! This sounds really interesting. Smart not heading to the adobe. He’d be a sitting duck. Like!
*grin* I agree – it might look like a shelter, but it’s a red flag for prey to avoid, methinks
I hope he and the mysterious box make a successful escape. At least I think I do, could be someone and something sinister as well…..
I’m not telling! But thanks for stopping by and commenting!
You set up such believable intrigue with this — no gimmicks really, just a box with a mystery inside. I could see him racing across the field, nothing overwrought, just easy to see. Nice!
I’m delighted it worked, Brian. Escapees always feel a bit cliched to me, so I’m glad you think I avoided gimmicks too.
Oh so many questions…what is he running from? Very intriguing and well done. Thanks for stopping by mine http://boomiebol.wordpress.com/2012/07/05/the-houses-secret-friday-fictioneers-76/
Thanks boomie, maybe i’ll flesh out the answers to all those questions sometime.
Mysterious box for the WIN. Great job!
LOL, thank you.
Great story. I agree that this one could be developed into a longer short story. I love how you used this prompt and it was written with the right amount of pace. Well done.
Thank you, Lindy, glad you enjoyed it. Keep an eye out for the longer version one day.
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