It’s Friday, so there’s a prompt from Madison Woods and a picture courtesy of Raina Ng. What caught my eye in this picture probably isn’t what caught everyone else’s eye – I hope you like it and I’d love to see your feedback.
If you’re looking for the last part of Voice Week it’s here on the previous post. And if you’re not looking for Voice Week, you should be – do have a look back over the past few days for a fascinating project I’ve been enjoying!
The Rebellion
The X-wing soared around the red planet. The Deathstar loomed in the distance, menacing and almost complete.
“He’s on my tail, Red Two, I can’t shake him!” The pilot pulled into a sharp dive, but the Tie Fighter mirrored every move.
“Roger that, Red Leader. Hang in there, buddy.” Luke lifted his own X-wing into a steep ascent.
Beep Beep Beep
“He’s locked onto me, Red Two!”
Luke pulled on a lever to manoeuvre into position, then closed his eyes and let the force guide his trigger. “Ready, R2?”
“Max! Get down off that table! Didn’t you hear the microwave?”
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Aw, sweet! I really liked the microwave beeps translated into the child’s play. May the force be with you. 😉
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Thanks Joanna, I got so excited about that when I realised what it could be. Clearly my inner child is surfacing today.
Yay! 🙂
Dear Jen,
Shades of your future? Or has the Empire already landed in your kitchen. This was a lovely contrast to all the darkness this evocative prompt has elicited from the FF gang. (On a technical note, it is rare that a pilot will ‘pull’ into a dive. Usually they roll in or drop down into one, both maneuvers resulting in negative G’s wheras ‘pulling’ result in positive G’s. Says so right here in my Tie fighter Operations Manual:)
Aloha,
Doug
Hi Doug,
My future? Yes probably. Although Max is named after the boy I already have to occasionally chase off tables – my cat! I just couldn’t resist those planet-like lampshades any more than the little boy could!
Thanks for the technical note. I’m going to pretend that I, of course, knew that, and it’s just the little boy’s POV which lacks technical precision. Not a mistake at all. Honest, governor! 😛
Jen
heeheeheehee. Love the sly humor in this peice. It’s very Calvin and Hobbesish.
Thanks, Jessica. I’ve never read C&H, but I’ve heard many good things, so I take that as a compliment!
You had me there. I thought this was real and I was carried along unitl Max’ mother had to spoil it all. Good show. 🙂
Well, that’s what Mums are for, I’m afraid, with their silly rules about not standing on the kitchen table in muddy shoes. So unreasonable!
Oh sweet! Wasn’t expecting that end at all. I could just see the little boy with a fighter jet in either hand, ducking and weaving with them. Very imaginative – full marks for a different take on the prompt.
thanks Sandra – I’m glad you enjoyed Max’s game as much as I did.
Oh, what a twist ending! It reminds me of the old comic strip Calvin and Hobbes where little Calvin was always immersed in his fantasy life. And it makes me smile. Great story!
Glad you enjoyed it, pillowbook!
Hi Jen… Naughty kids? Or just mosquitoes at play?
Good work! Quite different!
Naughty kid all the way – those lampshades are just too tempting for a young fan!
Nice twist, but I really want to see how the Mom handles that Death Star! How about a sequel? Thanks, Elmo!
haha, Moms are more resourceful than you’d think!
A great picture of a little boy playing. Nice work!
Here is mine http://blog.tompoet.com/?p=494
Thanks Tom, I’ll be over to check yours out soon.
Star Wars Jen? Really? Guess what you accomplished with this story? You.Just.Made.My.Day. 🙂
Loved it!
And you made mine with your comment. Glad you liked it, John!
Hi Jernnifer,
Ingenious of you to tie the photo to a Star Wars story. All the way through, I was wondering how you were going to relate the story to the photo, but in the last line, you did it brilliantly! Ron
And there I was thinking the Red Planet in the first line was the tie-in, Ron. Glad it worked out for you in the end.
For some reason, I anticipated a child playing in the kitchen. Maybe because I did so much of it myself as a youth – and now my grandchildren run screaming through the house as Superheroes.
Glad you still saw the humor in my piece. Corn cobs served as a replacement for paper in many outdoor toliets in the 1880’s and early part of the twentieth century. Coating them will oil from super-hot chinese peppers would, well . . . you know.
Well, no twist for you Russell, but I hope it worked for you as a reminder of fun times. And corn cobs already sound like an uncomfortable form of toilet paper, even before the application of hot peppers!
Loved it!
Great!
i was waiting to see how it was going to get to the kitchen. and it did. well done.
Of course it did, Rich – he was in the kitchen the whole time!
Delightful! As the mother of three imaginative boys (now grown) I remember the lampshades and towels tied around the neck to make them super heroes.
haha, thanks Rochelle. Imagination is a powerful thing if you let it run!
Beautifully done. But then, I would expect no less from you. I had (have) two sons who unfortunately grew up at the dawn of video games so I don’t remember them playing like this, using their imaginations. What a shame. I would have loved to see how their mother would have reacted with them standing on the table or counter tops!
Ooh, Paul, you’ve got a wicked side. Their poor mother probably had enough to worry about without your sons climbing on the table! Glad it worked for you though – maybe more your own childhood than theirs?!
I loved the ending. So adorable. You must have kids.
Not just yet – Max is modelled on my cat though!
Ha, as an avid Star Wars fan I can appreciate this completely. Loved the abrupt shift at the end.
Thanks Brian. It’s reassuring to see I haven’t offended the fans with my attempts at fanfic!
Great tension and imagery, then sweetness at the end. Nicely done!
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Star Wars fan fiction. You’ve my day!
Get us all wrapped up in sci-fi then bring us back down to earth – in the kitchen,no less. Well done
That’s sweet – reminded me of my childhood!! 😀
Clever, exciting, entertaining.
Great stuff.
a child’s imagination could be quite exciting, nice story