If you can’t beat ’em, join ’em. This week I’m posting my FF story early, just to see what difference it makes to my reading stats and to my own ability to read other people’s stories! Prompt courtesy of Rochelle and taken by Beth Carter – thanks ladies!
No edits this week – the story came to me complete, and the first draft was 102 words, so all I did was take out a couple 😉
The Perfect Gift
“So, I found the perfect car for Sarah to buy her boy when he turns 17.”
“Oh yeah? I thought she hated the idea of him driving?”
“She does. But he’s got his heart set on a car for his birthday, and you know she won’t deny him what he wants.”
“Well then, tell me about this car.”
“It’s perfect. Leather seats, fibreglass body … it’s stick shift, but that’s a useful skill to have these days.”
“Engine?”
“Engine?”
“Yeah, what’s the engine like? How many cylinders?”
“You gotta be kidding me. Sarah wouldn’t buy him anything with an engine!”
elmowrites 
🙂 Couldn’t you sleep Jen? Nicely done, made me grin.
haha, I just saw the picture on Rochelle’s post. My first thought was “what on earth am I going to write?” and then it came to me and once I’d written it down I thought I might as well post early for once. Still didn’t beat you though!!
exaaactly what my mom wants for me hahaha
I suspect mine would have done it too, if she could, kz
The perfect car for parenting. Once I got older my ma used to ask me if I wanted to borrow the car, and if I said no, she knew I intended to drink 🙂
Your ma is sly, Bjorn. I’m going to remember that one when Sebastian gets older!
That’s the right kind of car for my gals!
heehee, Sarah’s got company!
Perfect last line. I can see a 17-year-old sitting in the car in the driveway, making vroom-vroom noises. 🙂
Poor kid, I think he’s going to be a bit disappointed!
Yeah, not what he was envisioning, I’m guessing.
I could see Bill doing this. As for beating Sandra, it’s tough to beat those overseas Fictioneers. 🙂 This one didn’t need re-writes.
janet
Thanks Janet, I’ll just have to get up early when I’m next in the UK!
I love this!
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Hilarious!
Thanks!
Dear Jen,
Perfect story about a less than perfect car. I love how your stories spring full blown into your mind and leap onto the paper. may I please borrow a cup of that?
Aloha,
Doug
If I could bottle it, I’d charge, Doug. Doesn’t always happen, but it’s great when it does. No story from you again this week?
Hahahahaha! Very funny, though Sarah’s boy may be inclined to disagree.
I would think so, Abraham. Poor kid!
Hahahah… Well done. Sarah’s one savvy woman… 😉
I’m sure she’ll crack and let him have one with an engine … maybe when he’s 50!
Dear Jen,
Too bad I didn’t think of this when my boys were first driving. Maybe our insurance wouldn’t have been so high. ;). Very clever. Welcome to the Wednesday side of Friday Fictioneers. Very clever. Great job!
shalom,
Rochelle
I suspect it’s a good thing for your relationship with them that you didn’t, Rochelle, if not your blood pressure or bank balance! I’m gloriously tempted by this Wednesday milarky – check out all those comments already!
“Engine? What engine?” Heh Heh.
I tried to hold off on submitting mine until Friday (heck, I’m even ten hours ahead), but I just couldn’t do it. The story was sitting there, telling me, “Link me! Link me!” and it looked at me with those puppy dog eyes. Just couldn’t say no. 🙂
Oh the allure of the Dark Side. I hate how much I like it – I can resist everything except temptation! I’ll be over to read yours soon…
i don’t think i’ve ever seen you post this early. must have really clicked something. i like how it ended with sort of a “are you nuts?” moment.
fibREglass. not fibERglass?
I know, I’m coming over to the idea though, Rich! I suspect the RE / ER discussion is a US/UK thing. The internet seems to use them interchangeably, so I imagine it’s like Metre etc. Given I’ve used “stick-shift” I guess this is an American story, though, so I should probably change it.
no need to change it. just curious. certainly doesn’t affect the story one bit.
Perhaps the young man will realize he needs to be very specific in his requests. While most expect an engine, his mother is not like most i suppose. Interesting little detail she chose to ignore.
He needs to learn about SMART goal-setting, eh? To be fair on Sarah, she’s not actually the one who picked the car!
It might not even have wheels that roll. Good job .
Probably safest not, JK. Good to see you here again!
I laughed out loud at the ending. Nicely done 🙂
Hurray! I love it when a story works!
This is great! It reminds me of a joke I have with my kids, who have learned to roll their eyes when I tell them they aren’t allowed to date till they’re thirty-five. Now I know which car to let them borrow… 😉
Sounds like you and Sarah would get on!
being the mother of a seventeen year old boy, I sooo agree. Cute story.
ps: my boy does drive a stick shift.
I feel your pain, t-w. Being the mother of a 17 week old boy, I’ve got a lot to look forward to!
Yes! Very Good! My type of woman!
Scott
You and many of our other Fictioneers, Scott. I’m so pleased this one struck a chord.
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Loved it – very cute!
Thanks, t!
Lol..perfect. I remember when my son started driving. I bought him 4 cylinders 5 speed Ford Ranger that was as old as he was, it could barely make it up the hill, so yes, I can relate to this story and I love it!
I’ve been surprised by how many kids get bought their first car at 17. I borrowed my Mum’s to learn, then had to work to buy my own much much later.
Made me LOL, good one! 😉
Cool, thanks Lynda
That was simply charming. The dialogue was perfect and the story made me laugh. Thanks.
Thank you, Lindaura, and great to see you back with us!
So funny! Very nicely done.
🙂 Thanks
perfect car to expand the imagination…all teen drivers spend a year pretending to be mature drivers. ha! love your story!
Only a year, sunshine? I’m glad you liked it.
Practical problem solving in action! Thank you for the smile this morning 🙂
Good to see you again, Michael. Thanks for stopping by.
LOL. Fantastic last line, and the build up was great.
Thanks, Sarah Ann. It would have had alloys too if only there were more words!