Friday Fictioneers – My News

I hope I’m not the only one who had to write their news as a child, every Monday morning, a hundred words or so about what you did at the weekend. Maybe it’s the equivalent of Show and Tell, which we very rarely did. I sometimes wonder how much counseling primary school teachers need, and how many of the stories get passed around the staffroom – “George says his Mum took him shopping to Ann Summers!” or “Jane says her Mum was away and her Dad had Auntie Mary to stay!”

I hope you enjoy this week’s Friday Fiction story. We are hosted, as ever, by the incomparable Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, and this weeks picture comes from Adam Ickes. In other news, the compilation of FF-type stories I’m in is now available in Paperback ($4.49 / £3.09) as well as digital versions (98c / 77p). If you’re in the US or UK, click on the price to be taken to the relevant page. Otherwise, search the books section of your local amazon for “1 x 50 x 100” to get yourself a copy!

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My News

On Saturday, we went to the farm. I saw horses and cows and sheeps and trees. Theres a man at the farm called a farmer and he sed that cows is where milk was from. But I know bottles is where milk is from and machines and the man sed yes, now-a-days milk is from machines.

Daddy says in the old days there was real animals and trees and you could climb on the tractor. But Mummy says I would of got my new boots muddy on an olden days farm. I think we are better with the picture one.

 

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30 responses to “Friday Fictioneers – My News

  1. I love the voice in this one, though I feel bad for any kid afraid of getting a little mud on their boots.

  2. This one got me where I live on two counts:

    — I used to be a teacher and had to encourage the children to write every day. Your story writing today is pretty accurate of their style!
    — I once had a foster child who had been raised not to get her clothes dirty. One day I told her it was OK to get dirty and that she could crawl around in the grass if she liked… So she did. On laundry day I often regretted telling her that, but Oh did she have fun! 😀

    Loved your take, Jennifer!

    • Big up to you for fostering – however much or little of that you’ve done, you’ve changed the world.
      And thank you for the rest of your comment – I’m glad the “voice” worked for an expert like you.

  3. I love this, Jen, especially the part about milk coming from bottles (which no child now would even know.) You also made it impossible to correct any punctuation, spelling or grammar. Ha!!

    janet

    • Hahaha, I think I might write like this a lot in future! 😉 I wondered about bags or cartons for the milk, but in a future where milk is made in machines, I can’t see there still being plastic around to make either.

  4. This poor child is from a sanitized future.

  5. A futuristic story that reads remarkably like a story from the past. The balance of those two is artfully accomplished.

  6. Dear Jen,

    I was raised in the suburbs and I believe I was this child. I was all set to comment that you’d left an apostrophe out of “Theres” when I caught onto the voice. Adorable. (One of us has to be upbeat this week. 😉 )

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • A missing apostrophe, some shoddy spelling and grammar to make my old English teacher blush – I’m glad you realized I hadn’t completely lost the plot! I’m not sure about upbeat though, this is a bit of a frightening view of the future in my mind.

  7. Great story! This took me back to second grade and the question, “Where does chocolate milk come from?” At the time there was a commercial about it coming from chocolate cows, so, of course, that was my answer. I got pulled out in the hallway for that 😦

  8. a sad futuristic tale, very well told. i like the voice you used in this one 🙂

  9. Nice one Jen, and convincingly done. You must get quite a bit of practice with this dialogue, or if not now then certainly soon. Well done.

  10. Endearing (and a little scary), and very well done. 🙂

  11. Hi Jen,
    Great job of capturing the child voice and a charming story overall. Sometimes, it’s better not to know where things come from and your story makes the point that we live in an insulated world. Enjoyed it greatly. Ron

  12. Loved this sweet story from a child’s pov :-)It also made me a little sad and scared of such a future-its already happening-what we saw and experienced living in a small town,our kids have never had that kind of fun!Sigh!Wonderful take on the prompt Jen:-)

  13. Loved it in a very scary way. The voice is spot on and makes the story. Great tale.

  14. Very realistic voice of the kid.. and so sad and bleak future you paint.. (or is it already here?)

  15. Meranda

    I’m reading Quiet and the author makes the point that modern classrooms focus alot on group work – which isn’t the best for many children. Most people (according to many studies) are best able to be creative when alone so … good on your teacher for having the class write every Monday morning. That is a great alternative to show and tell.

  16. Never see mud. I can’t even imagine!

  17. I remember farms like that too! How lovely to see a child on FF 🙂 even if it is a grownup one now.

  18. Cute! I like your story through the child’s eyes.

  19. Well… now the truth is out and we know why you are so good at 100 Word Flash Fiction! I’m sure Sebastian is writing by now.

    Interesting story, Jen… maybe not too far off.

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