Friday Fiction – Sangria

Well, I’m back in Canada and wondering whether I should have left! -14 feels a lot worse when you were in +5 just a few hours before! We had a great time though and really enjoyed seeing so many friends and family back in Blighty.

And I enjoyed getting early on the roster for Friday Fiction last week. This week’s picture comes from one of FF’s heavyweights – Janet Webb. I hope you enjoy my story and stop by Rochelle’s site to read others.

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Sangria

“Is anything more beautiful than sangria?” Julie swirled the drink to let it soak up the Spanish sun.

Don tore his gaze from the harbour. “You’re expecting me to say ‘you’?”

“Expecting? Never. The wine and spirits are bitter, but do you know what really makes it perfect?” She didn’t wait for a reply. “Fruit and sugar. Sweetness is what makes the recipe work.”

“I brought you here, didn’t I? Sangria on the Main, you wanted, Sangria on the Main you got. See? I listen.” And he was back to his yachts, leaving Julie alone beside him, contemplating bittersweet perfection.

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51 responses to “Friday Fiction – Sangria

  1. Dear Jennifer,

    Sounds as if you know your men and your Sangria too well.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  2. Contemplating bittersweet perfection… Says a lot. Well-penned.
    -HA

  3. A compatibility issue here I think; still lie back and soak up the sun if not the attention. Glad you’re home safe Jen.

  4. I loved the last sentence.

  5. Sounds like they could both give a little more sweetness to the relationship! A well written tale.

  6. He is a thick headed one this Don. Bittersweet perfection indeed. Perhaps he need one more glass of sangria. Great story.

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  8. Good story. This couple seems to be in need of counseling, more for him than her.

  9. Helena Hann-Basquiat

    Lovely bittersweetness. You really captured that push and pull of long term relationships quite well. Welcome back to the arctic, darling. I’m just about sick of it myself. Right now I’d count +5 as practically tropical.

  10. A perfect distillation of imperfect love.

  11. Which one is the bitch him or her. Sounds like they been together too long.

  12. We need a bittersweet emoticon 🙂 very believable dialogue…enjoyed. thanks again for your kind words.

  13. I loved the whole concept of bittersweet perfection. Well written

  14. Dear Jennifer,

    I could hear and feel the silence between the lines. He did what she wanted and that’s all that’s required. She expects and craves more. Communication’s tough when you get to that point. Your “romance is dead” tag goes well with my “men are pigs”. 😉 Good one as always.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • Thank you for reading not just the 100 words on the page but the echoes between them, Rochelle. You are right that things are tough for them, but hopefully not unsalvageable. And yes, I like the exchange of tags!

  15. Don seems like another word that starts with d…I like that he confronted her with what would be a cliched romantic answer, and that she seems to know better than to expect that from him. Like Rochelle said, it’s what isn’t said that creates such great tension between these two.

  16. He seems like a lovely gent. I don’t know what her problem is. I’m kidding of course. They could both use some work. Perhaps it’s time to part ways or seek professional help.

  17. Ah men!If only they really listen!True-men are from Mars….A great story and loved the contrast:-)

  18. Sounds like the last gasp of a relationship grown old–well done.

  19. Relationships, even the naturally buoyant ones need a little help. You’ve wonderfully captured the tiredness and sniping that comes with complacency. Mine got there, but I’m adding sugar by the pound now!

  20. It does happen you know, this bittersweet perfection. Well penned Jennifer.

  21. It’s never quite as good in life as in our imaginations. My wife often says, “The secret to happiness is managed expectations.” As for the sugar, Mary Poppins said it best, “Spoonful of sugar helps the medicine go down.”

  22. camgal

    I felt a very strong connection to your story…”Expecting? Never” that’s a question with an answer I should always remember. Bittersweet perfection indeed…I also totally agree with storydivamg’s wife> happiness really is managed expectations. Good job

  23. I really love it when a short short story is so dense with back-story as this one is! Just these few words gave me a whole picture of this couple’s life together – the trade-offs, the constant checking of the balance sheet, the giving with one hand and taking away with the other. Well crafted.

  24. Hahaha! It’s true. Men never learn. I liked the “rhythm” of this and the conciseness of it. All bottled to perfection, Jen. Great! I enjoyed it.

  25. This is the most exciting writing I’ve come across in a while. ‘Bittersweet perfection’ is a wonderful brilliant expression and ‘unexploded metaphor’. It’s an impossible juxtaposition, of course, except if it’s Sangria. I’m truly impressed.

    • Wow, thank you! I liked bittersweet perfection but also alone beside him. i’m so pleased the piece worked for you

      • I’ve been looking for the name of the literary device you’ve used. Aside from a metaphor (and some would disputer this!) ‘bittersweet perfection’ might also be several others, especially an oxymoron. Is this an intentional use of a specific literary device? If so, please put me out of my misery and tell me what it is! Ann

  26. Ugh, reminds me why I am single. Thanks, I needed that 😉

  27. So true about many relationships… sounds like they could both be happy.. but somehow expectations never work the right way

  28. Sarah Ann

    I get the feeling Julie and Don aren’t going to make old bones together. Love the ‘…contemplating bittersweet perfection.’

  29. There’s always a sacrifice… err I mean “compromise”… Very full, well done story.

  30. You wove a single thread throughout this piece rather perfectly. You drove the point home without being too forceful or overt. Fantastic.
    -Alicia Audrey

  31. Ah so close yet so far. I don’t know whether to laugh or cry at Julie’s predicament. Bittersweet,indeed.

  32. Maybe both are right in their own sense!

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