Voice Week 2014 – 1: Sebastian

Welcome! It’s Voice Week and my challenge for the week is to show you five different people, all eating a banana. I’m not sure exactly how that particular subject came about, but perhaps there’s a clue in the slice of life that isย Voice 1.

Those of you who know me have a head start with this one, but the challenge for all 5 pieces is the same. How much can you tell about the character from 100 words centred on a banana? Are their voices distinct? I’ve delibately avoided description – do their thoughts alone tell you who they are? Because the characters in my head are pretty fixed, but only you can decide how well I’ve translated them onto the page. Leave me a comment today, or every day if you care to, and let me know. A brief explanation will appear the day after, on the next story.

 

SEBASTIAN

Bastian banana! Maaamaaaa! Banana!

Climb. Bastian chair. Mama chair. Mama sit.

Noooooo! Bastian banana!

Yum yum. Mama chair. Mama sit.

What colour banana? Red. No. Blue. No. <Giggles> Red. No. Yellow. Banana yellow. Yellow!

Banana. Mama open? Mama open?

Noooo! No open. Mama no open! Bastian do it.

Bastian eating.

Mama do it.

Noooo! Bastian banana! Nooo! Mama no open!

Banana broken! No banana! All done. Gone.

No wash! Down! Down!

Bastian banana. Yum yum. Mama open. Yum yum yum. Mama eat.

No! Bastian banana!

Bastian banana. Yum yum.

Nice. More banana. More. Yum yum.

Banana all gone. Apple pie?

 

Some banana-free time!

Some banana-free time!

 

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35 responses to “Voice Week 2014 – 1: Sebastian

  1. This sounds like the conversations i have with my daughter on a daily basis. ๐Ÿ™‚

  2. evan72

    Nice job! I can imagine this was probably a bit of a gamble, taking on and accurately representing a two-year-old-ish, but needless to say it paid off. Can’t wait for tomorrow!

  3. I’m thinking we’re getting the POV of a very young child with limited vocabulary ๐Ÿ™‚

  4. I certainly love this. I recognize this type of conversation from when my two children were littler. Well done!

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  6. A petulant child, just learning to speak, and trying to do things on his own. Quite descriptive, both frustrating and amusing slice of parent life.

  7. I absolutely love this voice, it’s very distinctive and jumps out of the page, I can see my nephew talking like this when he masters his words and sentences more. Brilliant job.

  8. Hahahah, yeah. This sounds like what must be going on in my nephew’s head, only he doesn’t have the words for it yet.

  9. This sounds very familiar. A small child learning new words and colors. The dialogue is true to life.

  10. KP

    Ha! The voice of experience. Well done.

  11. Ahh, the nonsensicality of a child’s thought process. (This is why I don’t want kids. Lol!) ๐Ÿ˜‰

    Five voices around eating a banana. I just… I love this so much. It’s such a unique choice for Voice Week! Is it strange for me to be getting this excited about bananas? Oh well.

    Looking forward to the other voices!

  12. I laughed when I read this; it’s such an accurate toddler voice, I feel. I love it.

  13. Sounds spot on based on what I remember from those long ago days. ๐Ÿ™‚

    janet

  14. Haha! My daughter has finally ended this type of conversation but my son is getting ready to go right into it. ๐Ÿ™‚

  15. I could picture the little boy getting all playful with the banana. Lovely picture ๐Ÿ™‚
    Long time, hope you’re doing well.

  16. It sounds like a baby or a toddler. Cute. ^ ^

    Stori Tori’s Blog

  17. Too cute! A toddler who wants to be independant but still needs his mama. Adorable!

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