Friday Fiction – The Crazy All-Weather Ice Cream Man

Home alone with two boys this week, and so far we’re all fed, no-one dead, so I’m counting it a success! There’s still time for it to go horribly wrong though…

On a more reliable front, this week’s FF picture comes from Dee Lovering via Rochelle. I hope you enjoy my offering, your feedback is encouraged.

Dee

The Crazy All-Weather Ice Cream Man

Georg knew people laughed; it wasn’t as though they were subtle about it. Youths would shove each other over, pull down scarves or shout through fur-lined collars.
“Chocolate cone with raspberry sauce and sprinkles please,” or “Extra ice in my lemonade, buddy.”
He wasted a lot of stock when they scampered off through the snow, laughing.
But Georg came anyway. On good days, she walked past, he might even hear her voice, chattering to her friends about the crazy all-weather ice cream man; on the best days, she bought something and he could search her face for his own reflection.

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57 responses to “Friday Fiction – The Crazy All-Weather Ice Cream Man

  1. I love your sweet story. He’s so painfully shy.

  2. My first thought was that he was shy. The second was that she’s his daughter and doesn’t know it. Nicely done either way.

    janet

    • Bang on, Janet! I thought the last couple of words could give it away, but maybe it was a bit subtle. I did have a longer version that made the relationship more clear, so perhaps I went too far the other way. Glad you spotted it!

  3. I love the hope that reverberates through this peace. πŸ™‚ Quite beautiful.

    Leo @ I Rhyme Without Reason

  4. Intriguing end. Nice one.

  5. OK. I’m thinking love lost to another, but he bides his time. Nicely written.

  6. Jen, This is sweet and subtle. I love all you say in the unwritten words here and want to throttle those insensitive imps. On the other hand, I wonder if he might do better to start peddling hot cocoa in the winter time.

    Best wishes with the two little ones.

    Cheers!
    MG

  7. Good work. I was pleasantly surprised by the ending. His daughter, I assume?

  8. I had a similar lost-relationship thought when I saw this picture, but didn’t know how to put it into words. Thanks for doing a splendid job of writing it down!

  9. Unrequited love…it hurts so good! Wonderfully written with such tenderness.

  10. You nailed it, Jen. As soon as I read the last line, I thought of a father doing anything he can to be near the daughter he never knew. There is a lot of questions here, like why he can’t introduce himself, but I think it works much better not being spelled out. Great job.
    -David

  11. Nothing like high fructose corn syrup and saturated fat to bring a broken family together. ha ha
    I couldn’t resist.
    Tracey

  12. Had to laugh at your “home alone” musings. πŸ™‚

  13. Such a beautifully poignant story. I like to imagine that for whatever reasons, he signed away his rights to her but never stayed completely away, waiting for that moment when all would no longer be silent.

  14. Lovely. I got the unknown father angle – artfully done.

  15. Unrequited love, like a wound that won’t heal.
    Good piece Jennifer.

  16. Dear Jennifer,

    A sweet story in more ways than one. I love the last line…search her face for his own reflection…magnificently subtle.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  17. The revelation in the last line makes this story so sweet and sad. Nice one.

  18. Wow, I got it too (even before reading Janet’s comment). Usually, these things fly over my head. A bittersweet tale.

  19. I didn’t get it before I read the comments. I was too fascinated by how he seems to have given up his own personality to be close to her.

  20. OMG, I want to hear more. I want the who story

  21. I guess love is crazy. Superbly done!

  22. Sweet as the ice cream and bitter as the cold.
    Excellent.

  23. Took a few readings to get it and the extra level of meaning it achieves. Very poignant and raises questions that maybe are better not answered. Super job!

  24. That’s lovely – a lost daughter?

  25. I felt so badly for him! I really enjoyed this.

  26. I’ll support both Janet and the subtle author by confirming having
    found the relationship clearly hinted to.
    Dark yet so realistic; well done, Tay.

  27. Oh, poor Georg. You’ve implied so much in this little snippet, and Georg’s love for his daughter is clear – I hope he speaks and she accepts him. I want it to end that way.

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