FF – Summer Rerun – Washed Up / The Colonel

(Sorry, I put the wrong link on the InLinkz. I’ve fixed it now!)

This week’s rerun is a double billing for me; I wrote two stories for this prompt back in the day. Both are below, although if you’re short for time, feel free to just choose one! Original posts are here and here.

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Washed Up

Washed up. That’s what he’d called them. Washed up.

Not shiny and clean. But like a body on a beach: the flotsam of life. That’s what her husband, Tom, had meant when she told him her plans. It’s too late to travel the world, Janine. We’re washed up.

Janine squeezed sand between her toes and watched the sun setting far out to sea. She took a sip on her pina colada and smiled.

If she was washed up, she was a pebble. Yes, buffeted by the waves, and the sand, and the journey, but only to make her more beautiful.

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The Colonel

“Glad to see you, son. Couldn’t stand another minute of that clap-trap. Stinks being the only one really alive around here. Sharp as sausages, that lot.”

Andy had a soft spot for the Colonel’s grumbling; it made a change from the cheerful repetitions of many of the residents.

“Takes a certain sort of chap to engage with a mind like mine. They haven’t a clue. Might as well be addressing a wall as some of them.”

Andy pushed a cushion further down the old man’s crumbling spine as he walked past. The Colonel carried on his monologue to the rosebush.

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17 responses to “FF – Summer Rerun – Washed Up / The Colonel

  1. Dear Jen,

    The Colonel is a rather poignant story. I could see him complaining to the rosebush.

    Note: This isn’t the page you linked to the inLinkz.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  2. Delicious wordplay with a hint of revenge

  3. The colonel makes me think of the place my mother lives in right now… it’s so tragic when the mind has left and maybe a rosebush is all that”s needed sometimes.

  4. Loved them both, Jenn.

    I with the Colonel. Some of my best conversations are with inanimate objects.

  5. Both stories are great. I’m applauding Janine and feel sorry for the Colonel, but he seems happy enough talking to the rosebush.

  6. I like both of these – both so different!

  7. I like her optimism. Sure we/she may be washed up but we/she get polished up!

  8. Both of your stories are terrific. I’m so glad Janine wasn’t washed up after all, and the colonel makes me want to cry, although I read your comment that he’s happy. Wonderful writing.

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