FF – Painting Over The Cracks

With apologies for being a little late this week, here’s my story for the Friday Fictioneers. I was reminded the other day of an old favourite from a few years ago, so if you read this one and want more from me, click here.

For now, here’s the photo from Roger Bultot, that inspired today’s entry. Your feedback is always welcome.

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Painting Over The Cracks

The view was dreary, so Mom picked dandelions to fill the apartment with colour and painted our rooms with cans the store threw out for being mixed wrong. Mine was “Resplendent Ruby”, but it came out green. When it snowed she showed us the beauty in each flake, and bustled us out on ‘adventures’ to scavenge the Clearance shelves for dinner.

For years, we bought it – credulous before our benevolent dictator’s relentless positivity. But even a kindergartener knows food isn’t good just because it’s in date. And that you don’t call Daddy “gentle” just because the bruises don’t show.

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27 responses to “FF – Painting Over The Cracks

  1. What a deep emotive piece… And a last line that cuts to the bone. Beautifully written!

  2. I thought it was going to be a story about overcoming adversity until that chilling last line. Well done

  3. Good story. I think a lot of people live in this sphere, maybe more so women and children. And it’s better the mom puts a positive spin on poverty rather than constantly whining. The last line opens a whole other can of worms.

  4. Ouch, a bitter twist. I was charmed by the paint that wasn’t what it said on the tin – all decorating should be done like this!

  5. ouuuu, a bitterly sad one. I don’t have to imagine this kind of life in a way, I lived parts of it. This brings back so many mems…good and bad. Great write! 🙂 ❤

  6. Oh it started out so optimistically, but then…

  7. Your writing doesn’t overpower the message. Great writing.

  8. Very strong, the understatement conveying so much that wasn’t said.

  9. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover

    The tone and feeling of acceptance lived in this piece. I was glad it did until the end. That should never be accepted.

  10. handmadejewelryhaven

    The sudden shift at the ending was brilliant!
    Thank you.

    – Lisa

  11. Horrific last line that really brings the piece to a climax. It’s almost cheery poverty until that last line blasts out the reality

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