FF – The Creek

Thanks to Ted Strutz for this week’s photo, which reminds me of the Zac Brown Band song “Toes”. I went a different way for my story, though. I welcome your comments as always.

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The Creek

Allie lay down in the creek. The rushing water eased her muscles, washing away a week’s sweat and mud. The water stumbled on rocks and branches, but never relented in its quest for the ocean. Allie wished she had the same certainty of purpose, but Owen was gone, their children were gone … She had no one and nowhere to race toward.

She was soaked when she finally stood again – diverting just a little of the creek from its mad rush to the sea to travel a while with her.

“You’ll get there eventually,” she whispered. “And so will I.”

 

 

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28 Comments

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28 responses to “FF – The Creek

  1. water can do that for you. lovely

  2. I could feel the cold water washing away her burden. Nicely done.

  3. michael1148humphris

    Beautiful yet also a sad story – I could feel her sadness.

  4. I could feel this one. Good job.

  5. Did I get this? A flood washed away her home and family?

  6. This is one of those stories that asks so many questions, Jenn. But, then yours usually do.

  7. Interesting how the same water that took things good away took away bad things as well. Nice work, Jen.

  8. Dear Jen,

    “…never relenting in its quest for the ocean.” That sums up your beautifully told story. Love it!

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  9. The stream as a symbol for hope – Lovely use of the image.

  10. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover

    Beautifully and lyrical. I felt her pain.

  11. A great read, the relaxing effect of the water reaches the reader and her positiveness at the end is very soporific.

  12. Melancholic. Nicely done.

  13. Thought provoking. In a way, I suppose we all end up there.

  14. I love the message of perseverance. Good one, Jen.

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