FF – Waiting

Thanks to Rochelle for not just hosting us, but providing this week’s image from her own brushes!

Waiting

Andy moved the ketchup bottle in line with the salt shaker. The table looked tidier now. Like that would make a difference. Maisy would be here any minute.

She’s not going to notice the condiments. The voice in his head was cruel.

‘In a world where you can be anything, be kind,’ he thought, but the snide voice didn’t read inspirational quotes from faded teatowels.

He restored the sense of random, not wanting to show he’d been waiting long: planning explanations, preparing for her tears.

The quote didn’t advise what kind meant. Was he being kind telling her the truth?

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38 responses to “FF – Waiting

  1. michael1148humphris

    A challenging story, which I enjoyed reading

  2. I was going to say these were the moves of a nervous person with something important to say and the nerves that precede it! Well done.

  3. Cruel to be kind, but better than carrying on a lie. Nicely done.

  4. This is going to hurt… And all the realignment of the condiments won’t change that.

  5. This is a great take, I like how the reshuffling of the condiments shows his nervousness. Maybe if he changes kindness to decency… For adults I usually prefer a hurtful truth to a kind lie. But of course it depends on the situation.

  6. Whatever he has to say seems like bad news. I think being kind is akin to being honest. Great mood in the writing.

  7. Dear Jen,

    It sounds like the truth is going to hurt, no matter how kindly delivered. Love the way you set the tone with him lining up the condiments. True confession: I did line up the condiments when I snapped the picture, thinking it would make a fun painting. 😉

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  8. We must be understanding with our OCD friends. Their world must be correctly organized. As for the truth? Who knows?

  9. Yes, often, telling the truth is kindness. The trick is to do it as kindly as possible.

  10. for all you know, she might have a surprise of her own. just saying… 🙂

  11. Condiments are unlikely to make what he’s about to say more savoury. An excellent take.

    Here’s mine!

  12. Very good description of a guilty person struggling with their conscience.

  13. I love the dialogue with his inner voice, but I think there will be no kindness in his revelation no matter how neat the condiments are. Cleverly written!

  14. Oh that’s going to be a tough conversation methinks.
    I love that quote
    Be Kind
    Very Dr Who. And nothing is more true. Be Kind
    I hope she takes it well

  15. I like this story – it’s subtle and sensitively told. I particularly like your pivot sentence “He restored the sense of random, not wanting to show he’d been waiting long: planning explanations, preparing for her tears.”

  16. Jen,
    Great point: truth isn’t always “kind” in the saccharine way, but necessary all the same.
    pax,
    dora

  17. What a powerful story. I’ve so been there with rearranging and unarranging things. I think we all have. Hope it goes well.

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