A little late this week; the small matters of a house purchase completed on Tuesday and the current house listing yesterday have taken just a little of my attention recently. Here’s Melanie – a recurring character for me. Search her name if you want to learn more of her story.
This snippet was originally 190 words and cutting it nearly made me give up. I hope it’s kept enough to make sense.
Fertilizer
Mrs Mwanna was talking to Daddy because he’s worried about Mummy. They were whispering, but they aren’t very good at it, so I heard him say “She’s too young”. Then, “My only worry at her age was saving for a GI Joe.”
Daddy’s younger than Mummy, so he wasn’t her age yet, but I prayed God to get Daddy a GI Joe for his birthday anyway.
Mrs Mwanna said “Try not to worry. When you pile shit on shit, it just stinks more, but when you pile it on flowers, they get stronger and more beautiful.”
The S word.
Twice.
elmowrites 
Good point about fertilizer put in right location.
Thanks! Everything has its place.
It still works for me
Thanks Neil. Glad you enjoyed it.
I am not sure Mrs Mwanna was helping the situation between Mummy and Daddy. However, she has rudimentary garden skills, let’s put them to good use and weed around the plot.
I’m not sure we should let Mrs Mwanna loose with the bag of fertilizer. She’d probably pick one of the less kind neighbours to receive a ‘gift’
Dear Jen,
I don’t know what they’re trying to hide from Melanie, but you’ve piqued my curiosity. Good job of telling it from a child’s POV.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks, Rochelle. I think the longer version was a bit clearer, but glad it piqued interested as it stands!
I enjoyed the child’s attempt at understanding the adult world. Nice one.
Cheers, Iain. She’s my favourite POV to write.
this made me smile. well done. 🙂
Thanks Plaridel!
I like Melanie’s perspective. She has no idea what’s going on but she wants her daddy to be happy – lovely.
I like it too, Margaret. Thanks!
Funny story, Jen. Well done.
Cheers Bill.